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A Personal Argument on Why the American Dream Is Still Alive

In this I Believe essay, the student describes his feelings on the American Dream. He believes that the American Dream is alive and well, but that it depends on individual motivation and desire.
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This essay received a B by one of Kibin's paper graders. Click here to see what was done well and what needs improvement.

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Neil's feedback:

"You have a clear thesis, and your essay is organized in a mostly logical way. I particularly liked that you not only described your own thoughts on the American Dream and why it is alive and well, but that you also addressed objections to that by rebutting the argument that the American Dream is dead. One thing that would really strengthen your essay is a separate conclusion. While you do begin to wrap up your ideas in the final paragraph, the conclusion isn't satisfying as it stands now. Ideally, the conclusion should not contain any new information, but should provide a satisfying tying-up of loose ends and should leave the reader with something to consider."

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