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The Importance of Upholding Traditions to Keep a Family United

In this reflective essay, a student talks about the importance of upholding traditions to help keep a family united. The student shares how her family enjoys watching football together every Sunday and doing special activities during the holidays such as backing cookies for Christmas.
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Angela's feedback:

"Your main message concerning the importance of keeping family traditions alive comes through in your writing, and you share some interesting examples of your family's traditions. Moreover, your discussion of how it's okay for family traditions to evolve adds greater depth to your argument. However, even though you're talking about your personal experiences, your work would be stronger if you maintained a slightly more academic tone. This can be achieved by not using contractions and not writing a word in full caps for emphasis. Fixing your run-on sentences would enhance the flow of your writing by giving the reader more places to pause and reflect on your statements, and note that in terms of MLA style, you're missing page numbers in the heading."

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