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Why Amazon.com Is the Best Website for Online Shopping

In this essay, the student writes about online shopping in general and why Amazon is superior for online shopping, especially compared to two other websites, Costco.com and Nomorerack.com. The areas of focus include the quality, customer service, return policy, and item availability, among other aspects, on the Amazon website.
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Crystal's feedback:

"You stay nicely focused on online shopping overall, and tie in a lot of details that highlight why Amazon is superior, but the overall focus and logic could be strengthened. The intro suggests you're going to compare the three websites, but the body paragraph only has details about Amazon.com (consider tweaking your thesis statement to address this), and the details in the body paragraph don't explicitly tie in the three aspects you call out in your thesis. Additionally, some aspects are underdeveloped--for instance, are there other reasons payments on Amazon are easy other than just being able to use a Chase credit card, and what about other credit cards? And what makes it easier to purchase something on Amazon vs. the two other websites (which also accept credit cards)? Moreover, the conclusion doesn't synthesize the main points about Amazon, and the final takeaway doesn't align with your thesis statement--bringing all that into better alignment would improve your essay. Finally, a thorough edit would help you clean up the grammar errors (changing POV to all third person as second person should be avoided in academic writing of this nature; pronoun/antecedent disagreements; inconsistent capitalization with website names, etc.) and awkward or missing phrasing, which would improve flow and diction. You do, however, do a pretty good job with general sentence structures and punctuation."

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