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Why Ambition is the Tragic Flaw of Victor Frankenstein

In this analysis of Mary Shelly's Frankenstein, the student discusses the protagonist's tragic flaw. The student argues that Victor Frankenstein's ambition is the main force that leads to his slow downfall and ultimate death.
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Bob's feedback:

"You've written a solid analysis of Victor Frankenstein's tragic flaw. Your essay is well organized and your thesis well supported. However, it seems that you are focused on writing long, intricate sentences and using lofty language. This can serve to detract from the points you are trying to make. In many places, these compound sentences are not grammatically correct or lose their meaning by trying to pack too many clauses into a single sentence. (Likewise, readability would be improved by simply referring to the title as "Frankenstein" after the first mention.) Much of the discussion is conceptual without directly referencing the events. This causes your essay to depend on your reader's familiarity with the story and forces the reader to infer which events you're referring to. Consider having a peer read this essay and mark any sentences that are confusing, vague, or interrupt the flow by causing them to stop and re-read."

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