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Kibin. (2025). Why money can't buy happiness. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/why-money-cant-buy-happiness-Ha1cnt0t
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Angela's feedback:
"You open your essay with a solid introduction and provide sound reasoning in your first two body paragraphs to explain why money can't buy happiness. While it makes sense to include a counterargument, your third body paragraph is less successful because you present the counterargument without refuting it. You're missing a conclusion that helps cement your stance on the issue in the reader's mind. Overall, you've got a strong grasp of writing conventions, but using a word such as "actually" twice in a sentence can make your work sound repetitive. The statement that begins "So getting your" needs thorough revision for clarity, and your use of the semicolon should be revisited. There are also some typos that need to be addressed, as seen with the use of "but" instead of "buy" in one instance."
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Kibin. (2025). Why money can't buy happiness. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/why-money-cant-buy-happiness-Ha1cnt0t
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("Why Money Can't Buy Happiness.")
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